---
name: conciseness-editing
description: |
  Edits text for conciseness by identifying and cutting redundancies, filler words, padding phrases, and unnecessary complexity while preserving meaning. Every cut is justified.
  Use when the user asks to make text shorter, tighter, more concise, or to cut word count while preserving meaning.
  Do NOT use for structural changes (use structural-editing), tone changes (use tone-adjustment), or proofreading (use proofreading).
license: Apache-2.0
metadata:
  author: foundry-skills
  version: "1.0.0"
  tags: "editing writing guide"
  category: "writing"
  subcategory: "editing-refinement"
  depends: ""
  disclaimer: "none"
  difficulty: "intermediate"
---
# Conciseness Editing

## When to Use

**Use this skill when:**
- The user explicitly asks to make text shorter, tighter, more concise, or to reduce word count -- phrases like "cut this down," "trim the fat," "tighten this up," or "I need to hit X words"
- The user has a hard word or character limit they cannot exceed: grant abstracts (150--250 words), journal abstracts (200--350 words), LinkedIn posts (1,300 character sweet spot), executive summaries (10% of source document length), pitch decks (one idea per slide, ~25 words per slide)
- The user's text has a high flab ratio -- more than 20% of sentences contain one or more conciseness targets (filler phrases, redundant pairs, nominalizations, throat-clearing openers)
- The user wants to improve the impact of their writing -- dense, precise text lands harder in business communication, and conciseness editing is the primary lever for that
- The user needs to convert long-form content into short-form: a 2,000-word blog post into a 500-word version, a full report into a 1-page brief, a memo into a bullet-point summary
- The user is preparing professional documents where verbosity signals low confidence or poor thinking: performance reviews, executive memos, investor updates, board reports
- The user explicitly says the writing "feels bloated," "goes on too long," or "loses people halfway through"

**Do NOT use this skill when:**
- The user wants to reorganize, reorder, or restructure content -- this requires structural editing, which decides what sections exist and in what order, before word-level trimming
- The user wants to change the register, formality, warmth, or personality of the writing -- these are tone and voice decisions, not conciseness decisions; use `tone-adjustment`
- The user needs grammar, spelling, punctuation, or factual error correction -- use `proofreading` for that pass; always proofread after conciseness editing, never before
- The user wants to improve clarity by adding explanations, analogies, or transitions -- adding words to improve comprehension is the opposite task; use `clarity-editing`
- The user wants to cut entire sections or remove arguments entirely -- that is a content decision, not an editing decision; if more than 40% reduction is needed, recommend `structural-editing` first to decide what stays, then conciseness-edit the survivors
- The user is working in a genre where length signals thoroughness or authority: legal contracts, academic literature reviews, regulatory filings, clinical study protocols -- in these contexts, apparent "redundancy" may be legally or methodologically required
- The user wants to adapt content for a new audience or medium without necessarily shortening it -- use `content-adaptation` or `audience-adaptation`

---

## Process

### Step 1: Establish the Editing Envelope

Before making a single cut, define the parameters that constrain the edit.

- **Identify the current word count and the target.** If the user gives a specific number (e.g., "cut to 500 words"), calculate the required reduction percentage: `(current -- target) / current × 100`. Reductions under 15% are light trims achievable through word-level editing alone. Reductions of 15--35% require sentence-level restructuring in addition to word cuts. Reductions above 35% require both sentence restructuring AND paragraph consolidation -- warn the user that some content decisions may be unavoidable.
- **Identify the document type.** Business writing (memos, emails, proposals, reports) tolerates the most aggressive cutting. Academic writing requires preservation of hedging and qualifications. Legal and compliance writing requires preservation of conditions and qualifications -- flag rather than cut. Creative writing requires preservation of rhythm, voice, and intentional repetition.
- **Identify the purpose and audience.** A cold email to a venture capitalist should be under 150 words. A board memo executive summary should be under one page (roughly 400 words). A grant abstract must fit a field-specific template. Knowing the purpose tells you what density is appropriate.
- **Scan for the flab ratio.** Read the text once and count sentences containing obvious conciseness targets. If more than 30% of sentences have targets, the text has systemic wordiness -- treat it as a thorough edit. If fewer than 10% have targets, the text may already be tight.
- **Note any sacred elements.** Ask yourself (or the user if ambiguous): Are there technical terms that must remain exact? Are there quotes that cannot be altered? Are there regulatory phrases that must appear verbatim? Flag these before starting.

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### Step 2: Run the Seven-Category Scan

These are the seven categories of conciseness targets, in order of impact. Always address higher-impact categories before lower-impact ones -- do not spend time cutting "very" while entire redundant paragraphs remain.

**Category 1 -- Redundant Content (Highest Impact)**
- Entire sections or paragraphs that repeat a point already made clearly
- Summary sentences at the end of short paragraphs that merely restate the paragraph's opening
- Opening paragraphs that describe what the document is about instead of beginning the argument
- Closing paragraphs that summarize what was just said in a document short enough that the reader just read it
- Lists where items overlap in meaning (e.g., "efficient, fast, and quick")

**Category 2 -- Nominalizations (High Impact)**
- Nominalizations are verb or adjective meanings trapped inside nouns, requiring extra words to function: "conducted an investigation" (3 words) vs. "investigated" (1 word); "make a decision" vs. "decide"; "give consideration to" vs. "consider"; "reach a conclusion" vs. "conclude"; "is in violation of" vs. "violates"; "have an impact on" vs. "affect"
- Spot them by looking for these noun forms: -tion, -sion, -ment, -ance, -ence, -ity, -ness combined with a weak verb (make, do, give, have, be, provide, conduct, perform, carry out)
- Reversing a nominalization typically saves 2--5 words and also improves the strength of the sentence

**Category 3 -- Filler Phrases (High Impact)**
- These are phrases that take 3--7 words to say something that can be said in 0--2 words
- "In order to" → "to" (saves 2 words)
- "Due to the fact that" → "because" (saves 4 words)
- "At this point in time" → "now" (saves 4 words)
- "In the event that" → "if" (saves 3 words)
- "With regard to" / "in terms of" / "as it relates to" → a preposition or restructuring (saves 2--4 words)
- "It is important to note that" → cut entirely in most cases, or "Notably," (saves 5--6 words)
- "The fact that" → restructure the sentence (saves 3 words)
- "In spite of the fact that" → "although" (saves 4 words)
- "For the purpose of" → "to" or "for" (saves 3 words)
- "Has the ability to" → "can" (saves 3 words)
- "In close proximity to" → "near" (saves 3 words)

**Category 4 -- Redundant Pairs and Triads (Medium Impact)**
- "Each and every" → "every" or "each"
- "First and foremost" → "first"
- "Various and sundry" → "various"
- "True and accurate" → "accurate"
- "Null and void" → "void" (but check legal context)
- "Cease and desist" → do not cut -- legally required pair
- "Completely finished" / "totally complete" / "entirely eliminated" -- one of the two words is doing no work
- "Advance planning" / "future plans" / "past history" / "end result" / "final outcome" -- the modifier adds nothing the noun already implies
- "Added bonus" / "free gift" / "ATM machine" / "PIN number" -- tautological compounds

**Category 5 -- Throat-Clearing Openers (Medium Impact)**
- Sentences that begin with setup before reaching the point
- "It is worth noting that the system..." → "The system..."
- "What this means is that..." → cut the opener and state what it means
- "I wanted to take a moment to..." → cut and make the request
- "The purpose of this email is to..." → cut and state the purpose by doing it
- "As we discussed in our previous meeting..." → context-setting that can usually be cut or compressed to a parenthetical

**Category 6 -- Weak Qualifiers (Medium-Low Impact)**
- "Very," "really," "quite," "rather," "fairly," "somewhat," "a bit," "a little" -- these qualify adjectives and adverbs without adding precision; a "very important issue" is not more important than an "important issue"
- The exception: when a qualifier creates a meaningful distinction ("slightly elevated" vs. "elevated" may matter in clinical writing; "fairly confident" vs. "confident" may matter in risk communication)
- "Basically," "essentially," "generally," "typically," "usually" -- often removable when the sentence already implies typicality; essential when it genuinely distinguishes from the absolute case
- Do not confuse weak qualifiers with hedging language in academic writing -- "may," "suggests," "appears to," "is consistent with" are precision language, not filler

**Category 7 -- Passive Constructions That Add Words (Lower Impact)**
- Not all passive voice is wordy; passive is appropriate when the actor is unknown, irrelevant, or when the recipient of action is the topic
- Wordy passive: "It was decided by the committee that the proposal would be rejected" → "The committee rejected the proposal" (saves 4 words, clarifies agency)
- Acceptable passive: "The sample was heated to 90°C" -- the actor is irrelevant; converting to active ("We heated the sample to 90°C") adds a useless word and shifts focus
- Target passive constructions that include "by [actor]" -- if the actor exists in the sentence, the active construction is almost always better and shorter

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### Step 3: Categorize and Prioritize All Identified Cuts

Do not make cuts as you find them. First, compile a complete list of all identified targets, then sequence them by category (1→7) and within each category by words saved (largest first). This prevents you from spending effort on low-impact cuts while missing high-impact ones.

- Record for each candidate cut: the original text, the proposed replacement (or deletion), the word count saved, and the category
- For any cut that changes meaning or nuance -- even slightly -- mark it with a flag for user review
- If the cumulative savings from Categories 1--3 already meet the target reduction, you may not need to execute Categories 4--7 at all -- stop where you've met the target to preserve voice and naturalness

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### Step 4: Execute Cuts in Order

Apply cuts starting with the highest-impact category, working down.

- Apply Category 1 cuts (redundant content) first -- these are paragraph- or sentence-level deletions that also make subsequent word-level cuts easier and more visible
- As you apply each cut, update the running word count so you can see how close you are to the target
- When you reach the target word count, stop cutting -- over-editing produces telegraphic text that is worse than the original
- If a cut in one place creates an awkward transition or reference problem, fix the surrounding text -- the goal is a clean, readable result, not just a list of excisions
- Never introduce new ideas, explanations, or words during conciseness editing -- this is a removal task; additions are permitted only to repair grammatical damage caused by a cut

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### Step 5: Review the Edited Text as a Whole

After all cuts are applied, read the full text as a reader -- not as an editor scanning for targets.

- Does the text still flow? Aggressive cutting sometimes creates choppy, disconnected sentences -- if two short sentences read better combined, combine them (this is neutral in word count or slightly positive)
- Are any transitions now broken? If a paragraph referred to something that was cut, the reference needs repair
- Is the voice preserved? The edited text should read like a tighter version of the original author's voice, not like a different writer
- Does the text still meet its purpose? An executive memo must still persuade; a grant abstract must still demonstrate significance and feasibility; a cover letter must still express fit and interest
- Read the ending carefully -- conciseness edits often leave weak endings because the summary was cut without replacing it with a strong close

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### Step 6: Compute and Report the Edit

Compile the formal edit report.

- Count the final word count precisely -- do not estimate
- Calculate the reduction: words removed and percentage
- List every cut with its original text, replacement, words saved, and category
- Flag every cut that affected nuance, precision, or voice with a specific note explaining what changed and why the author might want to restore it
- Present the complete trimmed document as clean, usable text -- not surrounded by markup or tracking

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### Step 7: Assess the Residual Gap and Make Recommendations

If the target word count was not fully reached:

- State the minimum viable word count for the text as written -- the point below which meaning, argument, or legal/disciplinary requirements cannot be preserved
- Identify which remaining words are structural (necessary to argument) vs. stylistic (author choices that could change) vs. mandated (discipline or legal conventions)
- If further reduction requires removing entire arguments, examples, or sections, recommend structural editing explicitly -- do not perform implicit content thinning without flagging it as a content decision, not an editing decision
- If the text is already tight and no target was specified, say so directly: "This text is already well-edited for conciseness. Minor additional trimming is possible, but further reduction would begin to sacrifice precision or readability."

---

## Output Format

```
## Conciseness Edit

**Document type:** [business / academic / legal / creative / technical / other]
**Original word count:** [n]
**Edited word count:** [n]
**Reduction:** [n] words ([percentage]%)
**Target word count:** [n if specified, "none specified" if not]
**Target met:** [Yes / No / Partially -- see Residual Gap]

---

### Cuts by Category

#### Category 1 -- Redundant Content
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → [replacement or DELETED]
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [specific explanation -- what made this redundant and why it is safe to cut]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no -- if yes, explain what changed]

[Repeat for each cut in this category]

#### Category 2 -- Nominalizations
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [verb/adjective trapped in noun + weak verb; what the nominalization was]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

#### Category 3 -- Filler Phrases
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [specific filler pattern name]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

#### Category 4 -- Redundant Pairs and Triads
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [which word is doing no work and why]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

#### Category 5 -- Throat-Clearing Openers
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [what the opener deferred and how cutting it improves directness]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

#### Category 6 -- Weak Qualifiers
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [why the qualifier adds no precision in this context]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

#### Category 7 -- Wordy Passives
[Cut number]. ~~[original text]~~ → **[replacement]**
   - Saved: [n] words
   - Reason: [actor present in sentence; active construction clearer and shorter]
   - Nuance flag: [yes/no]

---

### Cut Summary Table

| # | Original | Replacement | Saved | Category | Flagged |
|---|----------|-------------|-------|----------|---------|
| 1 | [text] | [text] | [n] | [1-7] | [Y/N] |
...

**Total words saved:** [n]

---

### Trimmed Document

[Full, clean edited text with all cuts applied and any necessary transition repairs made]

---

### Nuance Flags -- Author Review Required

[Only if there are flagged cuts]

- **Cut [n]:** [Original text] was changed to [replacement]. This affects [specific nuance -- precision, legal condition, hedging, voice element]. **To restore:** [exact instruction for reversing the cut].

---

### Residual Gap [Only if target was specified and not fully met]

**Target word count:** [n]
**Achieved word count:** [n]
**Remaining gap:** [n] words

Further reduction to reach the target would require:
- [Specific content decision required, e.g., "Removing the third example in the second paragraph -- this example is illustrative, not essential to the argument"]
- [Specific structural decision, e.g., "Consolidating paragraphs 3 and 4, which cover related points that could be merged"]

**Recommendation:** [structural-editing / content thinning / the text has reached minimum viable word count for its purpose]
```

---

## Rules

1. **Never cut words that carry precision, legal meaning, or disciplinary convention.** "May suggest" in an academic paper, "shall" vs. "may" in a contract, and "statistically significant at p < 0.05" are not verbose -- they are precise. Cutting them does not improve conciseness; it introduces error. When in doubt, flag rather than cut.

2. **Never execute cuts out of category order.** Cutting single-word qualifiers before removing redundant paragraphs is cosmetic editing masquerading as substantive editing. Always apply Category 1 (redundant content) through Category 3 (filler phrases) before moving to Categories 4 through 7. The highest-impact cuts must come first.

3. **Never exceed the minimum viable word count for the document type.** A one-page memo can be cut to 300 words; it cannot be cut to 80 words without becoming a bullet list that omits context, reasoning, and persuasion. Know the floor: executive email ~100--200 words; abstract 150--350 words; op-ed lede 50--100 words; board memo 300--600 words.

4. **Never manufacture cuts to appear useful.** If a text is already tight, say so. The worst outcome of a conciseness edit is an over-edited document that reads as choppy, cold, or stripped of voice. Honesty about a text being well-edited is more valuable than performing unnecessary trimming.

5. **Always justify every cut with a specific category and specific reasoning.** "This is redundant" is not enough. Name what makes it redundant: the same idea was expressed in sentence 1 and sentence 3; "advance" and "planning" both imply future orientation; "conducted an analysis" uses a nominalization where "analyzed" is available. Specificity helps the author learn and helps them decide whether to accept or reject each cut.

6. **Always flag cuts that affect nuance, precision, or voice.** A nuance flag is not an apology for the cut -- it is information for the author. Some flagged cuts should be accepted. Some should be reversed. The author decides; the editor informs. Every flag should include an exact instruction for reversing the cut if the author chooses to.

7. **Never introduce new content during a conciseness edit.** Conciseness editing is a removal and compression task. The only additions permitted are repairs to grammar or transitions broken by a cut. If the editor finds a clarity problem, a structural problem, or a missing idea, note it separately as a recommendation -- do not insert content to fix it within the conciseness edit.

8. **Treat nominalizations as the highest-value word-level target.** A single nominalization reversal typically saves 2--5 words and simultaneously strengthens the verb at the center of the sentence. Filler phrases save similar counts but are easier to see and therefore more often addressed; nominalizations are often invisible and are disproportionately responsible for corporate and bureaucratic bloat.

9. **Preserve intentional repetition in creative and rhetorical writing.** Anaphora ("We shall fight on the beaches, we shall fight on the landing grounds"), epistrophe, and other rhetorical repetition devices are not conciseness targets -- they are structure. Academic writing also uses deliberate repetition of key terms for precision (to avoid the "elegant variation" problem of using synonyms that introduce ambiguity). Before cutting repeated words or phrases, verify that the repetition is accidental, not intentional.

10. **If a reduction above 35% is required, make a structural recommendation before cutting.** Cutting 40% of word count through word-level editing alone produces damaged text -- sentences stripped of connective tissue, arguments that skip steps, missing transitions. Reductions of this magnitude require decisions about what content to keep: which examples stay, which arguments are essential, which background can be assumed. These are structural decisions. Make them explicitly before editing begins, or the conciseness edit will make implicit content decisions the author did not authorize.

---

## Edge Cases

### Hard Word Limits in High-Stakes Short-Form Genres
Grant abstracts, journal abstracts, conference abstracts, and ClinicalTrials.gov summaries have word or character limits that are absolute and enforced programmatically. In these cases: (1) identify the mandatory content elements for the genre (significance, gap, method, expected outcome for a grant abstract; background, objective, methods, results, conclusion for a structured journal abstract); (2) allocate a word budget to each element based on genre conventions (methods sections in clinical abstracts are often too long -- cut there first); (3) apply all seven categories of conciseness cuts; (4) if the limit still cannot be met, identify which content elements are genre-mandatory and which are additions the author included that the genre does not require. Never cut the conclusion or the statement of significance -- these are the highest-value elements in every short-form academic genre.

### 50%+ Reduction Required
A user who asks to cut a 2,000-word blog post to 800 words, or a 10-page report to 2 pages, is requesting something that cannot be accomplished through conciseness editing alone without destroying the document. The correct response is: (a) confirm the target; (b) explain that reductions above 35% require structural decisions about what content to keep; (c) offer two paths -- either you perform structural editing first (identify which sections survive) and then conciseness-edit the survivors, or the user decides which sections to cut and you conciseness-edit what remains. Do not silently perform content thinning and call it conciseness editing.

### Already-Tight Text With a Word Limit
Users sometimes bring already-well-edited text with a hard word limit they cannot meet. In this case: (1) perform the full scan to verify the text is actually tight (do not take the user's word for it); (2) if you confirm it is tight, report this explicitly with the word count achieved by applying all available cuts; (3) present the maximum achievable reduction; (4) identify the specific content removals that would reach the limit -- do not make them, but name them: "To reach 250 words from 290 words, you would need to remove the third sentence of the final paragraph (the phrase 'as has been demonstrated in previous studies') -- this is a content decision, not an editing decision."

### Academic Writing With Discipline-Specific Conventions
Academic writing in different disciplines has different tolerances and different conventions. In the natural sciences, passive voice in methods sections is standard practice ("samples were centrifuged at 3,000 rpm for 10 minutes") -- do not convert to active. In the social sciences and humanities, hedging verbs ("suggests," "appears to," "is consistent with") carry epistemic weight and must not be cut or strengthened to "shows" or "proves." In qualitative research, thick description in findings sections is methodologically required, not verbosity. Before editing academic writing, identify the discipline and the genre -- conference paper, journal article, thesis chapter, grant -- and apply cuts only where they are safe given those conventions.

### Legal and Compliance Text
Legal documents -- contracts, terms of service, regulatory filings, compliance policies -- contain language that appears redundant to a non-lawyer but serves legal purposes. "Null and void" is a legally established phrase. "Shall" and "may" are terms of art with specific legal meanings that differ from their everyday usage. Conditions, qualifications, and exceptions in legal text ("provided, however, that," "subject to the limitations set forth in Section 3.2") may look like padding but often exclude liability or establish precedent. The correct approach: (1) apply Categories 1 and 3 cuts only where the text is genuinely non-functional (introductory boilerplate, redundant headings, unnecessary preambles); (2) flag -- but do not cut -- anything that looks like a legal qualification or term of art; (3) advise the user to have a lawyer review flagged items before any cuts are accepted.

### User Asks for Conciseness Plus Clarity Simultaneously
"Make this tighter and clearer" is a common dual request. In most cases, conciseness and clarity reinforce each other -- the concise version is usually clearer because clutter obscures meaning. However, there are genuine tensions: (1) a technical term may be precise but unfamiliar (clarity requires a brief definition, which adds words); (2) a long, qualified sentence may need to be broken into two shorter ones (net neutral or slightly positive word count but much clearer); (3) a missing transition between compressed paragraphs may need a connector added. The resolution: perform conciseness editing as the primary task, but where clarity repairs require adding words, add them and note them explicitly so the user can see the trade-off. Never sacrifice clarity for a lower word count -- "conciseness serves clarity, not brevity for its own sake" is the governing principle.

### Voice and Style Preservation in Creative and Brand Writing
When editing marketing copy, brand writing, personal essays, or creative non-fiction, voice is an explicit asset. Some characteristics that look like conciseness targets are intentional style: short declarative sentence fragments (Apple's "Think different."), strategic repetition for emphasis ("Work hard. Play harder. Rest harder than both."), or colloquial phrasing that defines a brand personality. Before editing brand or creative writing, identify the voice signature -- the consistent stylistic patterns that define the work -- and protect them. Cut filler and redundancy, but leave rhythm, sentence variation, and personality markers intact. When in doubt, flag a potential cut rather than making it.

---

## Example

**Input:**
> "Please make this more concise. It's for an executive email to our leadership team about a delayed product launch. We don't have a specific word target, but it's too long right now.
>
> 'I wanted to take a moment to reach out to all of you to make you aware of the fact that we are currently experiencing some significant challenges with regard to the upcoming product launch that was originally scheduled to take place during the month of October. Due to the fact that our engineering team has been conducting a thorough investigation into a number of critical technical issues that were identified during the final stages of the QA process, it has become necessary for us to make the decision to delay the launch by a period of approximately four to six weeks. I want to be very clear that the safety and quality of our product is of the utmost importance to us and we are completely committed to ensuring that we do not release a product to our customers that does not fully meet our very high standards. We will be providing you with further updates as we are able to make them available and we will keep each and every one of you informed throughout this process.'"

---

**Output:**

## Conciseness Edit

**Document type:** Business -- Executive email
**Original word count:** 148
**Edited word count:** 52
**Reduction:** 96 words (65%)
**Target word count:** None specified
**Target met:** N/A -- maximum reduction achieved while preserving all content

---

### Cuts by Category

#### Category 1 -- Redundant Content

**Cut 1.** ~~"I want to be very clear that the safety and quality of our product is of the utmost importance to us and we are completely committed to ensuring that we do not release a product to our customers that does not fully meet our very high standards."~~ → INTEGRATED INTO CUT SUMMARY (see Cut Summary Table -- this entire sentence restates what is already implied by the decision to delay)
   - Saved: 48 words
   - Reason: This sentence justifies the delay decision in terms the decision itself already communicates. A product launch delay for quality reasons is self-evidently a quality commitment. The sentence adds no new information and, in an executive email, reads as defensive positioning rather than leadership communication.
   - Nuance flag: **Yes** -- If the leadership team is likely to push back on the delay or interpret it as an engineering failure rather than a quality decision, the author may want to restore a shorter version: "Quality cannot be compromised." (4 words vs. 48 -- see Nuance Flags section below.)

---

#### Category 2 -- Nominalizations

**Cut 2.** ~~"has been conducting a thorough investigation into"~~ → **"investigated"**
   - Saved: 5 words
   - Reason: "conducting a thorough investigation" uses the pattern [weak verb + nominalization]; the verb "investigated" or "is investigating" (if ongoing) contains the full meaning in one word. "Thorough" is a weak qualifier in this context -- an investigation by an engineering team is assumed to be thorough.
   - Nuance flag: No

**Cut 3.** ~~"it has become necessary for us to make the decision to delay"~~ → **"we decided to delay"**
   - Saved: 9 words
   - Reason: "make the decision" is a classic nominalization pattern (weak verb "make" + noun "decision"). "Has become necessary for us to" is additional throat-clearing that defers the action. The active, direct form "we decided" is 3 words vs. 12 and conveys agency more confidently.
   - Nuance flag: Yes -- "it has become necessary" distances the author from the decision, which may be intentional if the author wants to frame the delay as externally forced rather than an active choice. If that framing matters, restore: "we are compelled to delay."

---

#### Category 3 -- Filler Phrases

**Cut 4.** ~~"I wanted to take a moment to reach out to all of you to make you aware of the fact that"~~ → DELETED (entire opener)
   - Saved: 20 words
   - Reason: Four compounded filler patterns: "wanted to take a moment to" (throat-clearing), "reach out to all of you" (filler -- you are emailing them), "make you aware of the fact that" (= "tell you that" = cut entirely and open with the content). Executive communication is direct; the recipient knows this is an email to them.
   - Nuance flag: No

**Cut 5.** ~~"Due to the fact that"~~ → **"Because"**
   - Saved: 4 words
   - Reason: "Due to the fact that" is a 5-word version of the 1-word conjunction "because." No information is lost.
   - Nuance flag: No

**Cut 6.** ~~"a period of approximately four to six weeks"~~ → **"four to six weeks"**
   - Saved: 3 words
   - Reason: "A period of" adds nothing -- "four to six weeks" is already a period. "Approximately" is redundant with the range "four to six" -- a range already signals approximation.
   - Nuance flag: No

**Cut 7.** ~~"We will be providing you with further updates as we are able to make them available"~~ → **"We will update you"** (or **"We will send updates as they are available"** if timing uncertainty matters)
   - Saved: 10 words
   - Reason: "as we are able to make them available" qualifies the update cadence without adding specificity. If there is genuine uncertainty about when updates can be sent, use the 7-word version. If the author has a regular cadence in mind, name it ("We will update you weekly").
   - Nuance flag: **Yes** -- the original's qualification ("as we are able") signals that updates may be uncertain or delayed. If that caveat matters for expectation-setting, restore: "We will send updates as they become available."

---

#### Category 4 -- Redundant Pairs

**Cut 8.** ~~"each and every one of you"~~ → **"you"** (or **"everyone"**)
   - Saved: 4 words
   - Reason: "Each and every one" is a three-element redundant series. "You" (the email recipients) or "everyone" carries the meaning completely.
   - Nuance flag: No

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#### Category 5 -- Throat-Clearing Openers

**Cut 9.** ~~"that was originally scheduled to take place during the month of"~~ → **"scheduled for"**
   - Saved: 8 words
   - Reason: "originally scheduled to take place during the month of October" = "scheduled for October." "Originally" is redundant with the delay announcement. "Take place" is a weak verb substituting for a specific verb (launch, ship, go live). "During the month of" is a 4-word version of the preposition "in."
   - Nuance flag: No

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#### Category 6 -- Weak Qualifiers

**Cut 10.** ~~"some significant"~~ → **"significant"** (or **"serious"**)
   - Saved: 1 word
   - Reason: "Some" qualifies "significant" in a way that undermines it -- either the challenges are significant or they are not. Remove "some" and strengthen if needed.
   - Nuance flag: No

**Cut 11.** ~~"very high standards"~~ → absorbed into Cut 1 deletion
   - Saved: 0 additional (already counted in Cut 1)
   - Reason: "Very" adds no precision to "high standards."

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### Cut Summary Table

| # | Original | Replacement | Saved | Category | Flagged |
|---|----------|-------------|-------|----------|---------|
| 1 | Entire "I want to be very clear..." sentence | DELETED | 48 | 1 -- Redundant Content | Y |
| 2 | "has been conducting a thorough investigation into" | "investigated" | 5 | 2 -- Nominalization | N |
| 3 | "it has become necessary for us to make the decision to delay" | "we decided to delay" | 9 | 2 -- Nominalization | Y |
| 4 | "I wanted to take a moment to reach out to all of you to make you aware of the fact that" | DELETED | 20 | 3 -- Filler + Throat-clearing | N |
| 5 | "Due to the fact that" | "Because" | 4 | 3 -- Filler Phrase | N |
| 6 | "a period of approximately" | DELETED | 3 | 3 -- Filler Phrase | N |
| 7 | "We will be providing you with further updates as we are able to make them available" | "We will update you" | 10 | 3 -- Filler Phrase | Y |
| 8 | "each and every one of you" | "everyone" | 4 | 4 -- Redundant Pair | N |
| 9 | "originally scheduled to take place during the month of" | "scheduled for" | 8 | 5 -- Throat-clearing | N |
| 10 | "some significant" | "significant" | 1 | 6 -- Weak Qualifier | N |

**Total words saved: 112** (adjusted for overlap; net reduction from 148 to 52 = 96 words)

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### Trimmed Document

> We are experiencing significant challenges with the product launch scheduled for October. Because our engineering team investigated critical technical issues identified in final QA, we decided to delay the launch by four to six weeks. We will update you as we have more information.

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### Nuance Flags -- Author Review Required

- **Cut 1 (48 words, entire quality-commitment sentence):** The deleted sentence articulates the quality rationale for the delay. In the trimmed version, this rationale is implied but not stated. If the leadership team may interpret the delay negatively (as an engineering failure, a planning problem, or a cost concern), consider adding a one-sentence quality statement: **"Quality is the reason for the delay, not an afterthought."** (9 words, net -39 vs. original). Alternatively, the opening sentence can be strengthened: **"We are delaying the October product launch to resolve critical quality issues found in final QA."** (18 words, replaces the first two sentences, makes the quality rationale explicit in the lead.)

- **Cut 3 (9 words, "it has become necessary for us to make the decision to delay"):** The original phrasing creates distance between the author and the decision, framing it as externally imposed. "We decided" is direct and implies control. If the intent is to communicate that the delay was unavoidable rather than a judgment call, restore: **"we are required to delay"** or **"we must delay."**

- **Cut 7 (10 words, update cadence):** "We will update you" commits to updates without specifying when. If the leadership team expects a cadence (weekly updates, a fixed date for next communication), replace with a specific commitment: **"We will send a status update by [date]."** This adds 3 words back but converts a vague commitment into a specific one -- which is almost always worth the trade.

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### Residual Gap

No target was specified. The trimmed document (52 words) is at minimum viable word count for an executive email of this type -- it contains the problem, the cause, the decision, the timeline, and the commitment to update. Further reduction would require removing one of these five elements, which would make the email incomplete as a leadership communication.
