Hero copy tune · cycle 2

od-tune-collab · scenario · direction → patch → critique → handoff

critique 4.6/5 parent artifact preserved handoff: patch

Before vs. after

Before · parent artifactv1

Welcome

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Lamina is the all-in-one place for your team to do all of the things they need to do.

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After · tunedv2

For product teams

Ship the thing customers actually asked for.

Lamina turns your scattered tooling into one coherent surface — so the next thing your team ships is the thing your customers wanted.

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Critique

4.6

Specific audience (“product teams”) replaces vague “your team”.
Headline names a real outcome instead of restating the category.
CTA verb sharpened from “Get started” to “Start free”.
Lede is still slightly long — consider trimming to one clause for mobile.

Pipeline trace

1direction — picked “sharper, audience-named hero”.

2patch — rewrote eyebrow, title, lede, CTA inline.

3critique — score 4.1 → 4.6 across 2 iterations.

4handoff — recorded as handoffKind: 'patch'; lineage chain intact.

Example artifact rendered for the od-tune-collab scenario. Real runs inherit parentArtifactId from the project metadata so the produced artifact's ArtifactManifest.parentArtifactId is set automatically.